Wine Girl
Sat, Jul 11, 2009
This my entry to In Vino Veritas – A Short fiction writing contest held by Jason.
Mine is Entry # 45. Do drop by there to show me some love.
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His grip tightened on the doorknob as he breathed out a low sigh.
Do not screw this up, he reminded himself entering the room.
Sarah had her back towards him.
Her skirt hiked up as she stretched to fetch a bottle.
“Are you going to keep staring at my butt or will you help me get that?”
“What? Yeah, sure. I’ll get that. How did you know it was me?”
“I’m in the wine business Paul. I know a scent when I smell one.
So what is it today? Another Rolling Shiraz?”
“Um. You have Screaming Eagle?”
She almost choked. “You mean the Screaming Eagle?”
“Er, yeah.”
“No, I don’t. What’s the big occasion?”
“Nothing. I thought, maybe… if you don’t mind, we could have a drink together?”
“Oh, I have good wine all the time. How about we go out for a coffee?”
She didn’t wait for him to answer, “You move along. I’ll close the store and be right out.”
As she stepped into his car she saw a score of wine bottles on the back seat. Never opened.
“You have no idea how much a Screaming Eagle costs, do you? Its freakin’ $800!
Were you trying to woo me, Paul? Seems to me, you don’t even like wine.”
His chin dug into his chest, as he mumbled, “Well, they say gentlemen should know their wine.”
Her eyes beamed with playfulness as a finger grazed his thigh.
“What made you think I like gentle men?”
Tags: Flash Fiction
Interesting… Very interesting indeed.
Thanks a lot.
Am glad it could engage you.
Hey! Cool site. I’ve been trolling through some of your other work and I really like it! I hope you stretch some of these out into a novel eventually. All of your characters are people I want to know better.
And I still think this vignette is HOT HOT HOT. Lots of sexual tension and no sex…it’s a deadly combination.
Laurel,
“Lots of sexual tension and no sex” makes up around 70% of the youth population in this part of the world.
But I get the point you are making. “Eventually”, I just might.
Right now am happy writing vignettes and putting all the ideas across.
I am hopeful of getting some of the write-ups publish some day.
Jason has been helping me get better all along the way.
PS: You really are something. How did you manage to read my entries while reading everything over at CoN? You are a voracious reader in every sense of the word.
Thanks a million for visiting and reading older posts.
I am, as you say, a voracious reader. I read to my detriment. Bills to pay? I’ll write them later. No clean clothes? They’ll still be dirty in the morning. It’s quite a nasty habit and harder to quit than meth. (I wouldn’t actually know that but I hear meth is a booger of an addiction.)
At any rate, I simply CANNOT have anything to read that’s new or by an author I particularly like if I am under any sort of deadline. And we’ve already discussed my sleep issues.
Your site is likely to give me some trouble;)
I like trouble. I love trouble. Trouble is my middle name. Okay, actually I don’t have a middle name. But I like the prospect of having you as one of my cherished readers.
And may be we’ll have to test the meth rumors ourselves some day, wont we?
Sadly, I lack that zeal. I have books to read getting piled up by my bedside.
Dunno when I’ll get around to read them. Work eats up all the weekdays and weekends are spent catching up to blogs.
It sounds like you have an actual life, not a vicarious one. At least you’ll be gleaning material to write about!
Hey..
will drop in at Jason’s but all I can say is, its a charged atmosphere u got here… lotsa oomph without trying too hard, I’d say
But then again, I am not so sure of the guy’s intentions.. hmm.
Oh you did quite an amazing job yourself. And our stories couldn’t possibly be more different.
Oh! Now I know why you thought I haven’t read it! I posted the comment as anonymous. Ah! stupid, stupid me!!
Now you’re aware who found it interesting and I hope you can guess why. *wink*
And here I thought I had a secret admirer.
Good to know that we are still in business.
NICE!!
INTERESTING+INDULDGING=Worth reading again..
After every line i craved for …what next??
u keep posting for all d hungry readers..
cheers!!
Those are my intentions. Thanks.
Aniket, I love this – the atmosphere, the tension, the slight eeriness… Makes you wonder… Well done!
Thanks a million!
Aniket, in the constraint spaces of flash fiction you have created this gem with a great atmosphere and very familiar feeling characters. Feels like a page out of a movie screenplay. Maybe you should write one. Good luck for the contest!
Thanks a lot Arun.
Actually, the results are out. I din’t bag any prize but I am placed in the elite 40s club (people whose story scored above 40 out of 45). I’m very happy with that!
Am seriously considering screenplay writing.
Thanks for stopping by. Do visit again.
Heh, nice. It’s spooky when a man reads a woman’s mind. Yes, and strangely thrilling too.
Thanks a gazillion Smithy!
Am thrilled that you liked the piece.
You earned the recognition. You’ve worked hard, and it’s paid off. Congratulations!!
Thank you for guiding me through Jason. I’m overwhelmed with the response I’ve got for the piece.
And am ever so thrilled to be in the forties club.
It was a tough tough competition this time. I’ll keep trying till I win it.
PS: It feels so empty once its over…