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Postcard

Postcard

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oh, fine. i'll set this off then. come on now, kids. don't leave aniket (or me) hanging.

 

Postcard

It was a postcard that you sent
from someplace far away
from the coast of Argentina
or the hills of Paraguay

somewhere where you stayed
for some lost week or two
dulce de leche on your toast
a veranda with a view

I tacked it on the wall
where I slept, above my head
to stare up at the picture
and remember what you said

you never cared for structure
or for deep roots of devotion
and although I’m sure you loved me
I could not compete with motion

It was a postcard that you sent
with some flowers on a stamp
and another with a hero
or some president or champ

I ran my finger over
your familiar hasty scrawl
scratched out with a nub of pencil
and I tacked it to the wall

the people there were lovely
and the rum was 90 proof
and the welcome warm and real
as those tiles on the roof

you told me that I’d love it
if I ever made it down
but I knew how well you knew me
having never left this town

but my life of expectation
ran surprisingly askew
to the point I have forgotten
who you sent that postcard to

so I bought an old used suitcase
and I bought a tank of gas
and I sold what was worth selling
and the rest can kiss my ass

and I left that postcard hanging
on the wall above my bed
with some pesos in my pocket
and that picture in my head.

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  • http://www.foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com/ Aniket Thakkar

    I am not saying this coz this is your first post here. I am not saying this coz this the THE first post out here. But seriously Joaquin, this is one of my favourites!

    Its a complete story in itself full of passion, sadness, wit and triumph. This place could not have got a better start. (Am sure others would nod their heads too after reading this)

    I'm super excited about what others write in. :)

    Thank you so very much for breaking the ice and getting this place alive! I owe you one.

  • http://keepingsecrets-karen.blogspot.com karen

    As always, Joaquin nails it!!! Wonderful beginning (and how was this not on my radar?) Now, to follow joaquin is a daunting task, but I need to explore the prompt and try, try, try! I'm off on travels (Hey, joaquin, wanna meet in the desert?), and I won't be back at a computer for more than a week, so if I can't find inspiration before I go, I'll look for it in Southern California!

  • Sarah Hina

    Oh, great. The rest of us have to follow that

    Gee, Aniket, my schedule's suddenly looking busy…what with the whatchamacalit and the thingamajiggers….not to mention the sudden and total case of writer's block…

    Okay, I'll stop now. :)   I love that this postcard was stuck to his wall for all those years. Sedentary. And that he finally beat the inertia and took a leap of faith, to have that second chance at life again.  Sometimes, all we need is a picture in our heads, some gas in the car, and a hell-with-it-all attitude to reinvent ourselves.  Or to feel who we were all along. 

    Picture perfect!  And Aniket, this site is a great idea. :)   I'll try to come up with something for this prompt.

  • Metaphoracly

    Lovely.

  • Catherine Vibert

    Joaquin, no one can tell a poem/story like you.  No one.  This is a gem.  Love the way he left his old ways in the dust.  Perfect for Spring, leave the old behind, and reach for the new.  Lovely. 

  • http://margaretsagri.blogspot.com Margaret

    Joaquin, this is the first poem I've read of yours. Looks like I've been missing out on a lot!

    It's wonderful, tells a whole story and just flows with smoothness.

    I'm so glad he/she decided to give everything up for love in the end. That postcard sure worked wonders!

  • Metaphoracly

    "you never cared for structure
    or for deep roots of devotion
    and although I’m sure you loved me
    I could not compete with motion"

    It's himself he is going to find… life is to be lived… and it takes risk. Expectation makes us brittle. Really a wise, witty, enjoyable piece! This is a favorite already for me as well (as you can surmise, I read it a few times).

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