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Vacation

Vacation

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“You can’t be serious! It is not the place.”
 
“What do you mean it is not the place?”
 
“It is not the place we will spend our vacation in, is it?” She demanded, eyes wide open, furious.
 
“What’s bad about that one?” He wondered.
 
“Well…it is you know… old.”
 
“Old? It’s not that old!” He exclaimed.
 
“Of course it is, honey. Look at this. These chairs are like what? 100 years old?” She was staring at him waiting for a response.
He didn’t say a word.
 
“Look, they are covered with dust.” She continued.
 
“We could clean it up,” he muttered below his breath.
 
“Cl.. you said… clea.. no… did you really mean we would clean it up?!” He has not seen her that much frenzied ever. She sure was not the most easy-going person. And they had had some rough times, too. But what he saw now could not be compared to their worst times. He ignored her question and went into the bungalow. He knew she would follow him and so she did.
 
“You can’t just ignore me, can you? It is so not fair. That is not a vacation I have expected. The place is dull. I bet there are snakes in here.”
 
Just as she said this they heard some noise in the corner.
 
“See, told you, there can be snakes or even worse.” She cried totally horrified.
 
“There are none,” he cut her off. She started to annoy him. At first he was amused at her reaction but now that feeling had gone and he only wanted her to stop talking.
 
Which she was not able to. She kept blabbering about this and that. The walls were dirty, there was not enough furniture, only one room, no pool, even no fridge, and – oh, my God – no coffee machine.
 
He didn’t say a word while she was blowing off steam.
 
“I am not staying here!” She said.
 
“Fine!” He responded. “Go!”
 
He knew she would not move. He was right. She was standing there in front of him, looking right into his eyes, silently demanding an explanation. Sure as hell it was not the vacation she had hoped for.
 
He could not bear it any longer.
 
“Our hotel is half a mile down the road,” he smiled.  “Five stars. At the beach.”
 
“I hate you!” She hit him with her purse breathing a sigh of relief.
 
“I love you too, honey!” He laughed.
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  • http://www.amitu.com/blog/ Amit Upadhyay

    I tried to imagine this situation with three women I know well, and I have to say the person in this story has remarkably high amount of patience. 

    • http://www.thecolorsmagazine.com Lena

      I know girls who would accept it as it came and not get angry, probably. But I admit it could be a rare reaction to this!

  • http://www.foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com/ Aniket Thakkar

    Haha! Marriage is tough, eh? :)

    But it has its own sweet moments, just like this one. Loved it, Lena!

    You've had a break but you haven't lost your touch. Always a believer in love, you.

    Thanks a lot for playing along!

    • http://www.thecolorsmagazine.com Lena

      if not to believe in love, then what to believe in? :)

  • Sarah

    Aw, he was the snake!  Well, not really.  But he sure had her (and us) going. 

    I liked this more realistic representation of marriage, with all its small battles.  But I especially loved the sweetness at the end.  :)  Nicely done, Lena! 

    • http://www.thecolorsmagazine.com Lena

      Thank you, Sarah! I hope it really seemed that much real :)

  • http://travelling-rants.blogspot.com/ Travellingrants

    good write up..

    perso has really a good amount of patience but above all he understand her so well thats the part i love the most..

    level of understanding

    • http://www.thecolorsmagazine.com Lena

      Yuo, I guess that is the most important thing in the relationship. Am glad you liked it :)

  • http://lyricsandmaladies.blogspot.com/ joaquin

    no coffee machine – now that is a little scary – but i get the feeling he's pulled stunts like this before. i can almost see his eyes twinkle as he laughs. nicely done!

    • http://www.thecolorsmagazine.com Lena

      Yaaa, no coffee machine would surely be the worst that possibly could have happened! And I am sure he does it all the time to her and each time she falls into the trap!

       

      Thank you :)

  • Catherine Vibert

    I liked this!  The twist at the end made me laugh.  But you also brought up all the things that make me cringe about relationships, the funny part being that he knew exactly how she would react, and did it to push her buttons AND to make her laugh.  I'll bet she almost punched him with joy.  :-)

    • http://www.thecolorsmagazine.com Lena

      I am glad you liked it, Catherine! That is indeed how I imagined the end of it – she punching him with joy and they having a great vacation after that :D

  • http://margaretsagri.blogspot.com Margaret

    As I was reading through this, I thought…"Why the hell are these two people together, they haven't a thing in common?" – Until I got to the end and could just about see his huge grin as he got her all worked up.

    Great ending Lena!