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The summer of ’69

The summer of ’69

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‘Mooncherrypie’, he cried out…she didn’t even look behind. It was her special name, something he had invented for her.

She tossed her long black hair and stopped. His heart skipped a beat. ‘Would she turn and acknowledge him and his love?’

She did turn around but all she did was glare. Stared through him as he was nothing – all those hot, summer nights passed into oblivion in that instant.

She ran out of the store clutching her dress as it fanned out around her legs.

Tick tock went the clock into the silence that surrounded him..

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Written by: Kits on June 22, 2010.
June 22, 2010service Post Under Flash Fiction - Comments
  • http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com Aniket

    Its so short a piece that with a few edits could be translated to a 55 Word Fiction. But it is so good because it says so much with so little. It tickles the readers imagination and leaves to it the rest. I very much like it. I especially loved the line “She ran out of the store clutching her dress as it fanned out around her legs.” – Perfect blend of showing + telling.

  • http://lifeaseetees.blogspot.com/ Kits

    Thanks man. I am glad that it was another ‘death’ story :) I like the idea of leaving stuff for people to imagine and as you put it ‘tickle it’ :)

    • http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com Aniket

      I’ve always been a fan of tickling. ticker.in was my first website, which didn’t work out so well.
      But I still love the sound of this word a lot. Its one of those words that sound like its meaning. :P

  • http://lyricsandmaladies.blogspot.com/ joaquin

    wow – this puts the “flash” in flash fiction. i like the open-endedness, the room to imagine. i kind of wish she’d said something – some clue to her or to them – but like aniket, really liked her cluthing the fanning dress as she ran – and the last line leaves a nice echo in the reader’s head.

  • http://lifeaseetees.blogspot.com/ Kits

    Thanks Jaoquin :) I had been struggling with this one. A friend said ‘mooncherrypie’ to me and that triggered the post off so ever so relieved :)

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