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You left a letter that explains
read by a man
whose spirit drains

There was someone down the track
who stole your heart
who made you pack

With just your clothes, your hopes and dreams,
and ticket for
the nine-fifteen

You boarded and you took your seat
the whistle blew
you skipped a beat -

Three pages filled, left by your keys
with reasons and
apologies

Is all of you that still remains
read by a ghost
who’s chasing trains

joaquin
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Written by: joaquin on August 5, 2010.
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August 5, 2010service Post Under Poetry - Comments
  • http://keepingsecrets-karen.blogspot.com karen

    Joaquin never fails to nail the prompt and set the bar too, too high for the rest of us. He always makes me think, though, and I love his company, so I may be back for a little ride!

  • http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com Aniket

    Right you are Karen, right you are… but we’ll still be waiting for you to turn up.
    I’ve read it 5 times already and it all just, fits.
    Reasons and apologies are never good enough in the end, are they?

  • Sarah Hina

    Only you can ride regret and loss this well. I can hear those wheels kiss the track.

    I’m with Aniket–it all just…fits. Your transitions are flawless. The condensed stanzas feel like a departure. And the last stanza brings a shudder of recognition.

    Damn. I’d like to do something with this prompt, Aniket. I need more hours in the day!

  • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

    Wow this is good… form and function, and the message that gets across. Powerful. I like powerful stuff with wonderful aesthetics as a pleasant bonus :)

  • http://lifeaseetees.blogspot.com/ Kits

    Sigh your punchline! Too much as always….lovely writing and lovely reading it

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