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His Perfect Body

His Perfect Body

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He lies there. Flat on his back. A mere white sheet covering for his modesty. She runs her fingers through his hair. Then traces his manly jawline. Ever so lightly. Admiring his obviously Eurasian features.

She smiles. A serene, satisfied smile. Her natural pink lipgloss glistens as her lips stretch, revealing a row of pearly white teeth, as white as the shirt on her body, and the sheet on his.

She leans in, whispering to his right ear, “Oh, Takeshi… you are the epitome of perfection.”

He does not respond to her enticements. He doesn’t even reply. Just lies there quietly, eyes staring out coldly to the ceiling above them.

“Cold. Too cold,” she continues, feinting disappointment. “But at least you let me touch you.”

She straightens herself up, fingers now running down his bare chest. The smile lingers. He lets her take control, still unresponsive, still staring above into the nothingness.

She sighs, “Such a perfect body…”

The door behind opens. Michael walks in.

“Diana, what the Hell are you doing?” he demands. His eyes fall to the naked Eurasian lying on the table. “That’s Takeshi, isn’t it?!”

Diana quickly removes her gloved hands from the Eurasian’s bare chest, and grabs the scalpel.

“Alright then,” she says to the naked body, tone suddenly changed from seductive to innocently merry, “Let’s find out the cause of your death.”

29-year-old multiracial, multilingual grad student, whose random ramblings are mostly physiologically ‘inspired’ (as in mood swings/PMS). A fan of anything science-fiction/fantasy, with an affinity for electro/techno and gothic/industrial music, and keen academic interest in psychology and the cognitive neurosciences, THREE aims to bring no major changes to the world with her writings despite her (out-of-place) revolutionist thinking (i.e. always getting herself into trouble), and stubborn fashion sense. Your everyday bizarre 'typical' Aquarian indeed.
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January 13, 2011participate Post Under Flash Fiction - Comments
  • http://criminalmovies.blogspot.com Brent Allard

    Great story Three! Love the ending, really took me somewher I didn’t expect. You really made the flash fiction work for you. If I had more time before the reveal I may have seen it coming but as it is, you hit with it before i had the chance. Well done!

    • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

      LOL of course you’d have seen this coming, it’s your ‘specialty’ :)
      Thanks for the comment!

  • http://widowlady302.blogspot.com/ WidowLady302

    THAT my dear is what flash fiction should be. A complete twist that kicks the guts out of the reader! Beautifully done dear lady!

    • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

      Awwwww thanks :) )))))))
      Still new to fiction writing here, trying my best… glad you liked the twist :)

  • http://almostthere.biz SJ

    I never expected that, what a twist. I love a story that can turn itself on its head in the flash of a sentence. Brilliant!

    • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

      Ooh I take that as a “success!” for my flash fiction attempt :)
      Thanks SJ for reading :)

  • http://allergiesandceliac.blogspot.com/ Mary Hudak-Collins

    What an ending! I’m not much for doing a lot of reading, but this was really captivating. I found myself thinking about half way into story that if that was me I would tell him to ‘get a life!’ How funny is that, I thought when I got to the end.

    • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

      Yeap that’s what flash fiction is for — short light reading for those who don’t really have the time.
      “Get a life” OMG that would’ve been so ironic XD
      Thanks for reading :)

  • http://nelietatravellingadventures.blogspot.com/ Nelieta Mishchenko

    What a great story! I am defintely going to read more :)

    • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

      Thanks so much :)
      Still an amateur here, but hope I can please a few readers :)

  • http://lifelittlesurprises.blogspot.com a!kO

    Oh…I love it. :D Unexpected but made perfect sense …after I read it. It’s really misleading tho ;) Love this love this!!

    • http://www.facebook.com/narcissusvictorious THREE

      Thanks for dropping by, Aiko :)
      “Made perfect sense… AFTER I read it” LOL yeah I’m really loving that reaction :)

  • http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com Aniket

    That is one weird woman. :) I have to admit, I kinda saw it coming that he was dead. But I thought she’ll turn out to be some sort of a psychotic killer. Can’t say which is more disturbing though. :D

    Its a darn good flash piece, none the less. And it uses the prompt very wisely too. :) Thanks much for this and for that other thing of introducing me to the cool-gang.