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“It’s time.” Cariel shrugged his wings and held out his hand. Donna looked up with curiosity, excitement and a little fear. “Don’t be afraid, you’ve never let me down before.”

“Before?” Donna’s voice was dry and nervous. She took Cariel’s hand and stood beside him.

“Sure. You’ve made this journey at least a hundred times. And if I may say, you get better and better every time.” Cariel smiled and the iridescent mist around them shimmered like living mother of pearl.

“Was I afraid before?”

“Sometimes. You’re much braver now, though. You had a long time on the path this last journey.” Cariel reached down and caressed Donna’s wavy silver hair. He stood a good three feet taller than she, and although he was the older one, her image was of an old woman. He knew that her appearance was merely a projection of her soul, but he was feeling a bit sentimental about her current features. He had watched over her through wars and hunger, love and sickness, joy, life, and death. Maybe this would be her last trek, her last study on the sublunary world. She had earned it, he thought.

Donna stood straight. Her fear dissipated as Cariel’s voice gave her strength and comfort. She couldn’t explain it but she felt that their friendship was deeper and longer than she was aware. Peace and calm saturated her mind and she smiled at Cariel.

“I think I understand, and I have a feeling I’ll be back.” Donna let go of Cariel’s hand and took a small step backward. Her smile widened as the silvery mist enveloped and condensed around her. “Thank you Cariel.”

Cariel watched as she waved goodbye and faded into the ethereal mist of time and space. Elemental fire, water, earth and air melded with her being, transforming and transporting her to her new place in the universe. He waved back, ready to take his place, unseen, by her side for however long she would be on this journey. This one last journey home.

As Donna disappeared, Cariel heard the first cry of a newborn baby, and knew she was safely on the path. He smiled when he heard the call, and went to watch over her once again.

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Written by: SappleScoot on January 28, 2011.
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  • http://margaretsagri.blogspot.com Margaret

    I love this! I wanted to leave a comment earlier – but, up to now, comments were closed!

    I believe in rebirth and could fully relate to this. It felt so real – so right. Beautifully written, not too much – but just enough. :)

  • http://sapplescoot.blogspot.com/ Apple

    Thank you for your kind words. I just looked at the picture until it told me its story. I love it when a story happens like that. I read through some of your poems and they are so very nice! I’m now one of your blog followers.

  • http://margaretsagri.blogspot.com Margaret

    Hi, Apple! Thank you for visiting my blog and becoming a follower.

    I popped over to your blog too. Very interesting! You’re a gifted writer and poet. Looking forward to reading more from you. :)

  • http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com Aniket

    Sorry about the comments being closed thingy. I ran into some trouble while playing with the RSS feeds.
    I’ve to catch up on a lot of writing and reading, both on FF and otherwise.

    @Apple: I’d been meaning to comment on all the entries, especially yours as it has been a hit on FB where I share all the posts of FlashFiction. I’ll integrate FB comments here when I can, but for now I’ll be the happy messenger. :)

    My author friend James R Tomlinson had this to say:
    You roped me in with the picture, then I read the story. I like the thematic structure of this piece, how rebirth, in scientific terms, is a journey into time and space.

    Margaret, Catherine, Linda and Abhinav too expressed their love for the piece. I must say, it was genius take on the prompt and I loved it through and through. The writing was great, but the plot, pacing and fitting everything into a short piece and making it a complete and amazingly good read was so effin awesome. Hailing frequencies open! :)

    I see you’ve already found a friend in Margaret here. I’ve known her ever since I started writing over the internet and she’s one of the kindest souls over the internet. Looking forward to reading more of your work. May the force be with you.

  • http://sapplescoot.blogspot.com/ SappleScoot

    Thank you all so much! I’m enjoying the challenges and reading such interesting stories here. It’s folks like you and sites like this that keep writing interesting and fun!
    *LLAP* ;)

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